Today we went over to the hall for a magic show. I was really excited because I love magic shows. We walked into the hall and all you could hear was this loud dramatic music. The stage had been set up with boxes and all of the things he needed to perform magic tricks.
He started performing magic tricks. I liked the ones where he'd make fire in a container shut the lid open the lid and then a bird would come flying out. I also like the ones where he'd put a bird into a container shut the lid open the lid and then a rabbit would come out don't ask me were the bird went.
I quite liked the ones where he'd put a rubix cube into a box shut the lid open the lid and there would be several rubix cubes. I don't no about everybody else but I really liked that magic show and I really hope that he can come again.
Hi Harry, I like how you used paragraphs. I remember when the magician came to our school, I really enjoyed it. Was this magic show your favourite one? I hope he comes back as well. From Rori
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ReplyDeleteI also really like how you used paragraphs. I don't know if I was there or not or I just cant remember. I think you could have worked on instead of saying he maybe say the name so it makes sense. What is your favorite part about the magic show.
Alivia
Kia ora Harry, I agree that you paragraphed well. I like that you described the different tricks so cleary, it made a picture in my mind as I rememebered the show. The only minor feedback is that you could have a comma between out and don't. Maybe you could ask Koka Nolian if we can book in a show if another Magic show comes to Turanganui a Kiwa one day soon.
ReplyDeleteNga mihi, Rozie